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The government should reduce the amount of money spent on local environmental problems, and instead increase funding into urgent and more threatening issues such as global warming. To what extent do you agree?

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Recently, an increasing number of individuals have started
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environmental
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issue
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. Especially, one of those problems is
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whether administrations should allocate more funds
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 global warming. And it has become a heated controversy. Most
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citizens
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 the government definitely should do. Personally, I do agree
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First
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 undeniable fact that global warming is becoming the most serious problem compared with others.
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it already threatened national security for parts of
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 early report from World Environment Institution, the raised temperature caused the melting of glaciers, obviously, it brought a threat
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island
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 countries. So, global warming is a more threatening problem.
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global environmental issues is beneficial for
local
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 of decreased temperature may
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possibiliy
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 to tackle the local
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shortage of water;
therefore
, authorities allocate funding
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 global warming that bring positive influence on
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 environment at the same time.
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, the
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 that administrations spent an amount of money to solve
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global environmental problems may
cause
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,
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ordinary people lack professional knowledge and they cannot aware benefits of these
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hence
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 if the local government implemented the policy that allocates money to global warming could
cause
 a bad result, a low satisfaction from the public. In conclusion,
although
 local governments
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 funds
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 global warming may
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citizens
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, in a long term, there are tons of advantages. So I extremely support it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urgent issues
  • global warming
  • local environmental problems
  • funding
  • redirecting funds
  • broader environmental health
  • financial efficiency
  • return on investment
  • cost-effective
  • holistic approach
  • moral and ethical considerations
  • resource allocation
  • long-term consequences
  • short-term impacts
  • competing environmental concerns
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