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Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. , and what effects does this have on animal life and human society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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Introduction
It is said by many people that
pollution
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 of
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river
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rivers
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, lakes and seas is made by
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a human
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human
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humans
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 who lack
of
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apply
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responesibility
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responsibility
 to the surroundings. So there are many naturalists
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who establish
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establish
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established
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an organization
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organization
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organizations
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 to protect
the
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apply
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nature. Since
effects
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the effects
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from
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of
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pollution
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 will kill creatures in
water
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 or
made
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make
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they
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them
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 disorder.
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, it affects
to
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apply
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a human
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human
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humans
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 who
live
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lives
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 around
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river
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rivers
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 or
lake
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lakes
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.
Body paragraph 1
On one hand, urbanization and technology lead humanity to convenience and easier life while if progress is too fast, it will affect anything
such
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 as some
wastes
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waste
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 dropped in a
river
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.
In addition
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 to
this
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,
this
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 effect can
speard
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spread
 to other
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river
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rivers
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 or some
water
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 that may link with that
river
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.
Furthermore
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,
this
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pollution
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 will make any disease to
human
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humans
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 and
animal
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animals
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 or kill
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the creature
a creature
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creature
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creatures
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 in
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water
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the water
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Body paragraph 2
On the one hand, there are many organizations established by
naturalist
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naturalists
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prevent
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to prevent
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 nature and provide knowledge about
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the effect
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effect
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effects
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from
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of
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pollution
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to
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on
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 people.
Hence
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, the government should add the subject to any schools for embedding children to protect the environment.
Conclusion
To conclude,
water
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 surroundings should be protected to prevent disease or save
life
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a life
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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