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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. , and what effects does this have on animal life and human society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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It is said by many people that
pollution
 of
river
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rivers
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, lakes and seas is made by
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a human
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human
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humans
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 who lack
of
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apply
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responesibility
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responsibility
 to the surroundings. So there are many naturalists
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who establish
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establish
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established
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an organization
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organization
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organizations
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 to protect
the
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apply
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nature. Since
effects
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the effects
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from
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of
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pollution
 will kill creatures in
water
 or
made
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they
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them
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 disorder.
Moreover
, it affects
to
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a human
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human
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humans
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 who
live
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 around
river
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rivers
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 or
lake
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lakes
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. On one hand, urbanization and technology lead humanity to convenience and easier life while if progress is too fast, it will affect anything
such
 as some
wastes
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waste
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 dropped in a
river
.
In addition
 to
this
,
this
 effect can
speard
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spread
 to other
river
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rivers
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 or some
water
 that may link with that
river
.
Furthermore
,
this
pollution
 will make any disease to
human
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humans
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 and
animal
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animals
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 or kill
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the creature
a creature
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creature
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creatures
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 in
water
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the water
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. On the one hand, there are many organizations established by
naturalist
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naturalists
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prevent
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to prevent
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 nature and provide knowledge about
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the effect
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effect
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effects
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from
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of
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pollution
to
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on
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 people.
Hence
, the government should add the subject to any schools for embedding children to protect the environment. To conclude,
water
 surroundings should be protected to prevent disease or save
life
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a life
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.
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