IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Nuclear power is used both for weapons of mass destruction and the production of cheap, clean energy. Do the advantages of nuclear power outweigh the disadvantages?

#power #weapons #mass #destruction #production #energy
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In today's contemporary world, nuclear
energy
Use synonyms
 is used in weapons of mass destruction , while nuclear
energy
Use synonyms
 is
also
Linking Words
 used in
production
Add an article
the production
show examples
 of cheap and clean
energy
Use synonyms
. I agree with the latter view;
this
Linking Words
 essay will
discussboth
Correct your spelling
discuss both
 the points
on
Change preposition
of
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
view and
then
Linking Words
 provide a conclusion. On the one hand,
The
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
nuclear powered
Add a hyphen
nuclear-powered
show examples
 weapons can cause mass destruction and affects millions of lives and
economy
Correct article usage
the economy
show examples
 of a
country
Use synonyms
.
For instance
Linking Words
,
america
Change the capitalization
America
show examples
 dropped nuclear bombs on japan, which caused
huge
Change the article
a huge
the huge
show examples
 number of deaths and due to the radioactive elements present in the nuclear weapon caused
genietic
Correct your spelling
genetic
 mutations in all living beings.
Linking Words
Further more
Correct your spelling
Furthermore
show examples
, Nuclear weapons can only cause
downfall
Add an article
the downfall
show examples
 of a
country
Use synonyms
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, Clean and cheap electricity can be produced from
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
nuclear
power
Use synonyms
 and due to
this
Linking Words
 we can reduce the usage of
non renewable
Add a hyphen
non-renewable
show examples
 resources. Heavy usage of
non renewable
Add a hyphen
non-renewable
show examples
 causes pollution and leads to the economic downfall of a
country
Use synonyms
.
For example
Linking Words
, By increasing the production of
power
Use synonyms
 from
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
nuclear
power
Use synonyms
 will help a
country
Use synonyms
 to produce more
power
Use synonyms
 than the
power
Use synonyms
 produced from
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
non renewable
Add a hyphen
non-renewable
show examples
 resources.
moreover
Linking Words
, nuclear
energy
Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
 brought huge advancements in science and technology, due to the heavy production of electricity provides
breakfree
Correct your spelling
break free
electrcity
Correct your spelling
electricity
 and
this
Linking Words
 is due to
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
nuclear
power
Use synonyms
. To sum up,
although
Linking Words
 nuclear weapon causes serious damage to
Use synonyms
country
Add an article
the country
show examples
, they can
also
Linking Words
 help in
advancement
Correct article usage
the advancement
show examples
in
Change preposition
of
show examples
 science and clean
energy
Use synonyms
. I believe that nuclear
power
Use synonyms
 has more advantages.
Submitted by advaithsomula on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: