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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opininon.

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Internet learning is getting one of the most important
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 of obtaining information. Many people think that
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studying on
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social media is the best way to be educated, while others believe offline teaching is better. From my point of view, learning offline is more significant, rather than online
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. Nowadays we are living in
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technology is well developed so that it creates perfect conditions for education too. Internet learning became
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 popular and beneficial
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 of obtaining information, especially after the disease, which names “
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”.
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 countries
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students
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 more comfort and safety. Since 2020 the majority of humans understood the significant effects
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 e-learning, especially these days
students
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 want to learn on the social network
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because during the learning
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 they are able to study without leaving their location, from
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 side online lessons are available almost any time, which creates for
students
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 a huge amount of opportunities to improve their knowledge.
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, the science of university “RTU" in Latvia said that “
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internet studying is getting one of the most popular
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 of educating methods, so we should
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improve it and create for our young generation effective opportunities”.
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 number of
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 think that
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 learning on
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social network is not beneficial enough, because there would be some
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 of difficulties during
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online lessons,
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 misunderstandings
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 tutor or
students
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 are not able to ask
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questions from the teacher. Many adults are very intelligent and they try to require more and more information from the teacher
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 so
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perhaps humans do not want to learn online in some countries. To conclude, traditional methods of teaching
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 admitted by the world as a significant way of studying and no kinds of new studying ways are not able to replace
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