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Online education is becoming more and more popular.Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon.Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 that online
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famous.Some human beings believe that e-learning has so more and more useful sides that it will replace face-to-face
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 soon.Other individuals say that teaching is unique.From my way of thinking,online
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 is very useful for learning something. There are a number of significant benefits of online
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.Because of individuals learn many new
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school for studying.Another side,a lot of
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easily for being their life very well.
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person
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 have these things,they cannot learn online
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school despite being bad weather. Having weighed everything mentioned up,I can come to
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 conclusion that all things have many good sides and harmful sides
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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