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Online edution is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim thet e-learing has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face edution soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#edution #people #education
Some believe that e-learning is useful in modern times and will soon replace the face-to-face learning
method
, while others argue that the traditional
education
 system cannot be changed. Changing educational traditions in the future. On the one hand,
people
 believe that e-Learning has many advantages, it is easier to go to class,
save
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 money on travel, and these advantages can replace the way of learning in today's life, and I agree with that.
In other words
,
people
 prefer the easiest way in
this
 new life and e-learning is the system that
people
 should use.
For example
, my English course recently opened online courses because the class attendance is only 45%. Plus, seniors can enjoy learning while at home. The community will benefit from
this
 system.
On the other hand
, many argue that traditional
education
 is an immutable
method
 for the development of society. It is absolutely impossible to change
this
,
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 because all types of development of nations are adapted to
this
 traditional
education
.
Moreover
, in traditional
education
, the teacher and the student are
face to face
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 and all students are under supervision. will be Governments cannot build countries in the future if traditional
education
 is replaced. In conclusion,while
people
's
opinion
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 vary in many ways,I personally believe that e-learning is the
method
 which is beneficial for both
in
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learning
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method
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 as well as
upcoming
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 days
also
.
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  • unparalleled flexibility
  • educational content
  • study at their own pace
  • virtual classrooms
  • inclusive and diverse
  • cost-effective
  • physical infrastructure
  • personal interaction
  • hands-on experience
  • structured environment
  • fosters
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • direct interaction
  • practical experience
  • indispensable
  • hands-on training
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