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Every country in the world has its road rules but many drivers don't obey them. Why is this happening? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Every country has
a
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 own road
rules
. Freight laws are important in each country because they need for their safety. Meanwhile, the chauffeur liked to ignore them every time. The main cause of
this
 problem as well as a few solutions will be discussed in
this
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chauffeur
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 nowadays and hurried up, like some humans might be late and in a hurry, go to work or meet an appointment,
disobey
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 the laws on road.
This
 situation has
been
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happened everywhere,
like
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daily
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 basis.
In addition
, some
chauffeur
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 use
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the phone
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phone
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 during driving. As well as, they like to find to
last
-minute speed up driving when the traffic light started to turn red.
Additionally
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 they do not follow the signboard when they are driving
in
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 the main artery.
One
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 the other hand, one of the best
solution
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is that they have to pay a tine the
government
 if they break the
rules
.
Also
, if the
government
 imposes a high penalty on them, they will have to obey general
rules
. It brings profit
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government
. Another solution is that the police should take driver's
license
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 back because many drivers do not know about the traffic
rules
. That's why
,
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 many accidents happen
because of
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them.
Therefore
, they need to learn the freight laws again. In conclusion, everybody must follow traffic
rules
 to avoid an accident
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. Both the
government
 and individuals are responsible for
this
.
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