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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instances for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Skills define how well a person is based on
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 of
achievements
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. It is often seen that some human beings have natural abilities whilst others
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Although
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 hobbies can be learnt by a pupil to achieve
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. In
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both
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 of the views and give my opinion. Youngsters have natural skills in their hobbies without being given any
guidance
 as they feel confident in achieving their
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. They feel that they could uplift themselves and
also
 participate in various competitions. Without any proper
training
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 individuals could do well in a specific event on what they are
pefect
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 and able to do perfectly.
For instance
,
child
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 can play football without any
guidance
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However
, Some individuals say that proper training must be given to youth to become
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better
person
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 for their goals. Youngsters seek
guidance
 in order to achieve their
ability
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. Nobody is born with special talents
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 they would be able to master in their skill. They often would not be interested in the particular hobby
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 would find it tedious as they believe that they have mastered their capacity. In Conclusion, An individual must seek for
guidance
 to master their ability. In my opinion, every child must be given proper facilities that
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them
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 interests in their hobbies
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate talent
  • predisposition
  • genetics
  • psychology
  • natural abilities
  • disciplined practice
  • child prodigy
  • rigorous training
  • stimulating environment
  • nurturing talents
  • perseverance
  • dedicated effort
  • compensate
  • initial advantage
  • inherent ability
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