These days, people prefer to throw damaged items away, while in the past, they used to repair and use things for a long time. Why do you think this change has happened? What are the effects of this change?

While in the past,
people
used to try to repair damaged items and
use
them for a long time, nowadays these items are more likely to be thrown away and replaced with a new
one
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ones
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. The reasons for
this
change in human behaviour
is
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due to the developed economy and
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the influnce
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influnce
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influence
of media.
Firstly
,
people
in
modern
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world earn more
then
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than
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they used to,
therefore
, they
are now afford
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now afford
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to buy new and more modern products. In the past, personal income was still low,
therefore
, with
the
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limited
earning
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earnings
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,
people
tended to
use
an item for a long period of time and try to fix any broken part in order to increase the lifespan of the
product
.
However
, the economy has
perform
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better which helps to increase workers' wages.
Moreover
, with the advance of technology, production is costing less which helps to reduce the cost of
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a commodity
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commodity
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commodities
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compared to personal
earning
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earnings
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.
As a result
,
people
now have more money to spend on more
commodity
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commodities
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and they normally prefer to buy new
stuffs
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even to replace the old
product
with the same function even if the old
one
is still in good
use
.
Secondly
, our
socielty
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society
is significantly influenced by the advertising industry. It is
easily
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to find a piece
of
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advertisement anywhere and
anytimes
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anytime
in our lives. There are adverts on televisions, radios, magazines, billboards, and even projectors installed in schools and universities. advertisements are mostly used to persuade
people
to buy new products,
therefore
, it promotes consumer culture.
People
from all age groups, even children, are influenced by
this
culture which
encourge
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encourage
encourages
them to spend more money on buying new
stuffs
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stuff
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instead
of spending money on repairing and
maintainent
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maintaining
maintained
.
One
othe
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of the
other
possible reason is that the cost of producing
new
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a new
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product
is less than repairing an old broken
one
,
therefore
there
are
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more business
offer
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offering
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to replace an old
product
with a newer model to their customers rather than doing repair and
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maintenance
. In general,
people
nowadays are more likely to replace
an
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broken item rather than
trying
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to fix and
use
them for
longer
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a longer
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time because their increased
earning
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earnings
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enables them to
be afford
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for buying newer and more model products.
Adertisement
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Advertisement
is
also
the main reason for promoting a culture of consumption rather than repair and
maintainment
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maintained
maintaining
.
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