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Some people say that protecting the environment is government's responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss views and give your own opinion.it

#people #environment #government #responsibility
A good environment is
a
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key to
live
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 a healthy or long life. It is important to protect it from unwanted elements around
the
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societies.
However
, Some people
belive
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believe
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 that its
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the government
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government
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government's
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responsiblity
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responsibility
 to protect them
or
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while
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other
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others
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suggest
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suggestions
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 that we should take
its
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responsiblity
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responsibility
responsible
. I
belive
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believe
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 It is
a
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 equal
responsiblities
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responsibilities
 from both sides. To some
extend
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extent
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,
Government
 has the power of higher authorities because we
belive
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believe
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 and we depend on the
government
 rules and regulation
that is
build
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 for us.
Government
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The government
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 of
world
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the world
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 has the ability to control the
world wide
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worldwide
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 action to reduce
the
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pollution by
emmision
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emission
emissions
 of
fossile
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fossil
 fuel and other big events around the
world
 which cause
globle
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global
 warming, melting glaciers.
On the other hand
,
individual
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an individual
the individual
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 has their own
responsiblities
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responsibilities
 to understand their role around the environment.
Civiliance
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Civilian
Civilians
should keep following the acts created by
govenments
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governments
 to protect
around
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ourselves
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themselves
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for
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,for
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 example,
use
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the use
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 of public
facilties
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facilities
such
 as public washrooms,
recycle
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recycling
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system
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systems
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,
green
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a green
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 garbage
system
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systems
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 and so on.
Moreover
, it is said
my
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by
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 authentic people that not any power
of
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in
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world
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the world
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 can make your
surroundin
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surrounding
 dirty if you
commited
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committed
commit
 to
make
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making
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 it
clean
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clear
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 in routine by yourself. In conclusion, By
diccusing
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discussing
 both
of
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views
i
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I
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belive
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believe
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 that it is
a
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the
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responsibilties
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responsibility
 of both sides to make it possible for
future
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the future
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 or protect our
environmrnt
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environment
.
however
, the
goernment
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government
 has a role
to
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in
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settelment
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settlement
 on
major
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the major
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 side of
world
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the world
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 on
big
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a big
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 scale,
similarly
,
individual
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an individual
the individual
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 has their own role to protect their surrounding to make
environment
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the environment
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 clean and healthy for all of us
or
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in or
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 future.
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