Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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It is argued that in today’s modern era masses have a variety of choices. I completely agree with
this
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state
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. Here, I am going to discuss my viewpoints in upcoming paragraphs.
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with, there are manifold reasons to support my viewpoints.
Firstly
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, nowadays we have
number
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a number
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of options in
clohing
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clothing
. There are multiple stores, outlets , malls and supermarkets, which are loaded with clothing variety with reasonable prices.
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in ancient times, if people wanted to purchase any branded attires and branded items. They had to face more difficulties as compared to the present because people had to go
foreign
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countries or nations to buy
that particular items
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that particular item
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. Moving
further
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,
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secondly
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the quality of education is improved. To explain it. Students have
a very good opportunities
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a very good opportunity
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to take the advantage of education because nowadays, schools are providing smart classes, protectors , laptops and computers, which makes their work easier. For ,instance 15 years ago , scholars had not
this
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kind of facilities to improve their
study
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. They just learnt and read from only books because they were deprived of the latest technology . To sum up, There are many advantages of having multiple options at present. But we cannot neglect that due to
advance
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technology
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we are losing our roots and identity of previous times.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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