Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.
It is argued that in today’s modern era masses have a variety of choices. I completely agree with
this
state
. Here, I am going to discuss my viewpoints in upcoming paragraphs.
Replace the word
statement
To begin
with, there are manifold reasons to support my viewpoints. Firstly
, nowadays we have number
of options in Change the article
a number
the number
clohing
. There are multiple stores, outlets , malls and supermarkets, which are loaded with clothing variety with reasonable prices. Correct your spelling
clothing
For example
in ancient times, if people wanted to purchase any branded attires and branded items. They had to face more difficulties as compared to the present because people had to go foreign
countries or nations to buy Change preposition
to foreign
that particular items
.
Moving Change the determiner
that particular item
those particular items
further
, secondly
the quality of education is improved. To explain it. Students have Add a comma
,secondly
a very good opportunities
to take the advantage of education because nowadays, schools are providing smart classes, protectors , laptops and computers, which makes their work easier. For ,instance 15 years ago , scholars had not Correct the article-noun agreement
a very good opportunity
very good opportunities
this
kind of facilities to improve their study
. They just learnt and read from only books because they were deprived of the latest technology .
To sum up, There are many advantages of having multiple options at present. But we cannot neglect that due to Fix the agreement mistake
studies
advance
Replace the word
advanced
technology
we are losing our roots and identity of previous times.Add a comma
,technology
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite