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The chart illustrates the export earnings of a country in distinct businesses for two years 2015 and 2016.
Further
, the table represents the percentile changes in each category of exports in 2016 in comparison with 2015. After analysing the data, we observed that the country is dealing in different categories of the export markets
such
 as petroleum products, engineered
goods
, gems and jewellery, agricultural products and textiles. It can be clearly seen that most of the sectors have grown in 2016 with the exception of the jewellery business which faced a sales downfall of 5.18% as compared to the previous year. The major change is witnessed in the export of textiles which hiked by 15.24% in one year while the lowest effect is seen in the sale of farming products which only increased by 0.81%. Petrol and engineering
goods
 have shown noticeable growth as their demand increased by 3% and 8.5% respectively. Overall, it is outlined that the major dominance of the market remained the same in both years as Petroleum
goods
 and engineered commodities continued to rule the market with sale revenue varying between $55 to $65 billion in both years.
However
, in 2015, textiles
goods
 earned the lowest revenue of around $25 billion, but in 2016, both the agricultural and clothes businesses are performing almost equally and earning nearly $30 billion.
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