In some countries, people are having children at later age in life. What are the reasons? Do the advantage outweigh disadvantages?

Raising
kids
at an old
age
might be a big hit in some countries.
Although
for some
couple
having
new
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baby born
bring
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them joy and pride as they
are officially become
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new
parents
, we cannot pigeonhole the possibility of
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sword in terms of
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and mental issue if they are not well-prepared to handle
this
position.
This
essay will discuss
about
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how raising
kids
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at in
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in
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an
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early
age
might bring
parents
to
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several drawbacks for their
kids
or even for their
marriage
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harmony.
First
and foremost, one of the major reasons why some
couple
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couples
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decide
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raising
kids
at later
age
into consideration is owing to career settlement.
This
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supporters believe, achieving their dreams in working or studying is way more
a
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priority. In fact, having children might distract their goals since they have to grow and nurture their
kids
from
day to day
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life.
For instance
, in South Korea where locals are facing a shrink
of
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birth fertility since raising
kids
ost a lot of money.
Parents
should save their income for their
kids
' education, health and daily needs which makes them feel
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the burden
a burden
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burden
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, compared
just
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living as a
couple
. Another assumption might
related
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relate
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to quality time.
This
might ensue to some
newlyled
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newlywed
couple
as they
still
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comfortablle
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comfortable
to spend
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honeymoon time the most with their partner before having
kids
.
However
, raising
kids
at later
age
also
have some drawbacks. As they are getting older, it can take a risk to give birth and might cause women in danger. Let us take
example
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in
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Indonesia, where some women experience miscarriage as
she
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give birth
in
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40-50 years old. If
this
phenomenon continues for
long
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time, the fertility rate in
country
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will
be
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significantly decline and impact
to
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the country's economy. In conclusion, even though raising
kids
at old
age
can possibly
risky
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for women,
however
, we have to consider the readiness of couples to bear the position
as
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parents
.
Hence
, both of them are ready financially and mentally to have
kids
after some consideration, it will
also
give positive
impacts
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to
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their
babyborn
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baby born
grow
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progress.
Thus
, the positive effect of having
kids
at later
age
definitely
surpass
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the downside.
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