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Some people say that the most important requirement of a modern city is an effective public transport systems. While other people believe that there are other important requirements for a city. Discuss both views, give your opinion.

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 about whether it is
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useful public transportation or
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other
the
their
 facilities that
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moderate
modernize
 a city. In the following essay, both
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 of
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 will be discussed and at the end, I am going to give my personal opinion about it.
to begin
 with, In many places, the Capital of a country is chosen from the most modern cities where more people from different groups live in. Undoubtedly, a populated city
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 a transportation system
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 of
poeple
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people
 in order to ease their way of commuting to work and schools which is helpful in controlling some issues like traffic jams and air pollution as well. the other belief is true at the same time. Non-rural areas are more likely to have
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 difference in demands and what
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 modern towns from old cities is the ability of people to use a wide range of facilities
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 a level that
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 their needs.
consequently
,
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institutions
, healthcare services,
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 are required in big cities as well. I personally think that
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 a public transfer is a necessity for modern towns in
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comparison
 with rural areas.
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