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Some people say that the most important requirement of a modern city is an effective public transport systems. While other people believe that there are other important requirements for a city. Discuss both views, give your opinion.

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Introduction
people have
different
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a different
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opinion
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opinions
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 about whether it is
the
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useful public transportation or
othe
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other
ther
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their
 facilities that
modernate
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modernise
 a city. In the following essay, both
point
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 of
views
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view
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 will be discussed
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and
at the end
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, I am going to give my personal opinion about it.
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to begin
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 with, In many places, the Capital of a country is chosen from the most modern cities where more people from different groups live
in
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.
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Undoubtedly, a populated city
require
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 a transportation system
that is
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 available to
majority
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the majority
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 of
poeple
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people
 in order to ease their way of commuting to work and schools which is helpful in controlling some issues like traffic jams and air pollution as well.
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the other belief is true at the same time. Non-rural areas are more likely to have significant
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 in demands and what
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 modern towns from old cities is the ability of people to use a wide range of facilities
in
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 a level that
meet
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 their needs.
consequently
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,
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institutions
, healthcare services,
malls
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and malls
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 are required in big cities as well.
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I personally think that
,
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 a public transfer is a necessity for modern towns in
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comparsion
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comparison
 with rural areas.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the introduction by clearly stating your opinion and outlining the main points you will discuss in the essay.
task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and provides adequate support for that idea.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid small grammatical errors and ensure clarity and correctness in your writing.
task achievement
Your intention to discuss both views is clear and shows a good understanding of the task.
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Some relevant points about the need for public transport and additional facilities were mentioned, which is a good starting point for discussion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • congestion
  • pollution
  • livable
  • connect
  • jobs
  • schools
  • services
  • opportunities
  • inclusion
  • save time
  • economy
  • businesses
  • green spaces
  • housing
  • safety
  • infrastructure
  • health
  • well-being
  • community
  • balance
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