It is commonly believed that some people are with certain talents for instance for sport and music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. Discuss both views and give tour opinion.

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In
this
period of globalisation, giftedness is an ability that people for the necessities of life and developed
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such
as sport, communication,
speech
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, and it should be taught to do in
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children
so that they become
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useful a person for
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and environment. Another belief is that
children
should be free to have other
skills
.
This
essay will compare and contrast both opinions, and my opinion, which is in favour of the former view and will be discussed in a sensible conclusion. On the one hand, all
skills
are good and have
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unique for one another to improve the ability that individual
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, specifically,
children
have to realise
about
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their
talent
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like music, writing, and
such
like
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. In
this
circumstance,
children
study according to their
skills
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and
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effort to increase significantly if
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in daily life, so that they have provisions for the future.
For instance
,
children
have sports
skills
in the field of football,
thus
,
children
will practice every day to improve their abilities.
As a result
, the
talent
that
children
have become beneficial for other people, particularly in
this
country.
On the other hand
, on its contrasting side, not everyone has the
talent
to become a musician, sports, and
such
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.
In other words
, teaching
children
to become musicians or athletes must be taught especially since they were young because of these two talents not all
children
can master
them
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.
For instance
,
children
who like to read and are forced to learn to sing,
this
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will have a negative impact on the child when he grows up.
As a result
, the child who was supposed to be a musician failed because the
talent
he had cultivated since childhood did not match his abilities. To sum up,
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children
have to think more adequately so that
children
study
in
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their
skills
that will benefit the environment.
However
, it will depend upon the people's mindsets and which view they favour.
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