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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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Some
people
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 like
apartments
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 as their place of living, whilst
others
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 believe that living in a
house
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 is better.
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 are less than
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 if it is about regular
persons
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people
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. Both views will be discussed in
this
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 essay. On the one hand,
people
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 may believe that living in a
house
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 is better because it is more comfortable
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 since
houses
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 are bigger than other types of residence.
Houses
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 usually are chosen by
people
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 with big families, because it is the best way to with
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 amount of
people
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 in one place.
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, in
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houses
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 big families can give
his
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their
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 own room for each member, which is very complex.
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, living in a
house
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 can give more status
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people
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, because not
everyone
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 can spend his equity in
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 kind of living place. When the owner of the
house
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 invites guests, they can think that these
people
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 are very good.
This
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 statement can be funny, but most
people
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 buy
houses
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 for
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 reason
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 because German analysts do
the
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 survey, where they find that many
people
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 need
this
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 type of satisfaction, like wanting attention from
others
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.
On the other hand
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, living in a
house
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 is very expensive and not
everyone
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 has
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the opportunities
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opportunities
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opportunity
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 to have
it
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one
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. Poor
people
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 cannot spend much money on
houses
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, like energy, water and other types of expenses.
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, the price of
houses
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 is very expensive and
people
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 can choose
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small
apartments
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, which can be cheaper.
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, we can see statistics, which explain that more than 60
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 are living in
apartments
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, because from other statistics, we can see that only 10
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 can name
them
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themselves
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as
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rich persons.
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, living in a
house
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 cannot give these types of opportunities to
children
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, like
apartments
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. It is for
this
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 reason that
children
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 want to play with
others
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 and in the garden of
apartments
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 they can do it, when in
houses
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children
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 only sit at home because
everyone
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 has their own garden. It can be bad for
children
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,
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 because they can lose social skills
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 since British scientists find that
people
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 who communicate more with
others
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 when they are a child are more social than
people
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 who do it less. In conclusion, living in
houses
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 has more disadvantages than not for
everyone
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, it can be better for
people
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 with more opportunities. Living in a
house
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 is very expensive and only
people
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 with a quiet capital can live there.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
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  • commutes
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