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describe your leisure time and give your opinion about advantages and disavantages of having leisure time

#leisure #time #disavantages
Nowadays, recreational
activities
 are the most crucial part of everyone's
life
 , despite the fact that we all do not have much
time
 to do our routine chores. Personally, reserving at least one hour a day for hobbies is nothing but a favour that I can do for myself. The advantages of free
activities
 outweighed their disadvantages. On the one hand, we all have lots to do during the week or even during the day and always forget about our goals of working. We do different jobs and
activities
 just to amend our
life
 and make ourselves comfortable. Due to
this
 fact, my personality is adapted to doing sports for my leisure
time
 and maybe playing some video games with my friends. Running helps me to reset my memory and all bad experiences and start again the
next
 working they. It is the main and even the only benefit of free
time
 working out that I do. The other positive side of free
time
activities
 It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score. is that you will contact other social jobs and behaviour and make a change in your personality if it is necessary.
On the other hand
, there is no negative point for free
time
 movements but overdoing them will ruin the whole intentions which you schedule to reach. Even though,
this
 is arduous to find someone who has
time
 to free hobbies ,
,
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 there are some people who still have
time
 and indulge in their free
time
 and ruin their
life
. In my ,opinion
this
 is the only detriment that might be considered for free
time
activities
. To sum up, saving
time
 for doing everything you want is the main target of
life
 and maybe some people forget about it.
However
, I always prefer to do my routines fast and the remaining
time
 will be used for my pastime. Running is the main part of my free
time
 and maybe some video games
besides
 my best friends which reset my memory and refresh my soul to do my best for the
next
 working day.
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