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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

#people #work #company #organisation
At present, a group of
people
 preferred to do self-
work
, rather than to do
under
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it under
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 any
company
. There are many reasons
human
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humans
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 do it and it has many demerits
also
 and will discuss relevant points along with precise examples and back up my view.
First
 of all, when workers
works
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work
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 under any organization, they do not get all of
freedoms
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the freedoms
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, which need personally
and
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apply
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to do
work
 spontaneously.
Moreover
,
few
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a few
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time
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times
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 due to overpressure
people
 suffered different types of health problems.
secondly
, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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organization do not provide sufficient facilities
to
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for
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 their
work
,
as a result
,
people
are influence
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are influenced
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 22 personal business and personal business no boss who create pressure
to
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on
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 you
for instance
majority
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the majority
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 of
company
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the company
a company
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 never provide
competent
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competitive
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 salary according to
present
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the present
a present
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 situation so that
people
 attracting to their private
work
 to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their demands due to
this
 reasons, there are many disadvantages suffered
of
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by
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 cell employee person fastly with regard to freelancing, they have to do
majority
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the majority
a majority
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 of
work
 personally as a consequence self
employed
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employees
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 feel more
barden
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burden
Barden
then
 as a
company
 employer
for example
 when
people
work
 at a
company
 they
work
 on the part of
this
company
's
work
, but personal workers have to complete all of
work
secondly
,
itself
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apply
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employees face any major problem it is difficult to overcome
this
 situation because they do not have much capital and available
people
 who provide capital and suggestion
for example
 in
business
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the business
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 competition itself,
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the employed
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employed
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employees
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 do not succeed it is challenging to overcome
this
 situation. conclusion, it is obvious that
people
 are now
influencing
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influenced
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 to
freelancing
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freelance
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 despite different types of disadvantages
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • work-life balance
  • earning potential
  • job satisfaction
  • financial risk
  • irregular income
  • job security
  • financial instability
  • benefits
  • health insurance
  • paid leave
  • retirement plans
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