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These days, people prefer to throw damaged items away, while in the past, they used to repair and use things for a long time. Why do you think this change has happened? What are the effects of this change?

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this
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the
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 21st century, technology is growing
in
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at
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 a fast
phase
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pace
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.
People
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 are using advanced technology
which
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, which
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 makes their
life
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lives
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 easier.
However
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,
on
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in
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 the name of
advancement
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 they
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also
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are also
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 making those gadgets and artificial materials which are destroying
nature
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. These
things
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 cannot be biodegradable
and
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or
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recycle
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recycled
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.
Before
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Before,
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people
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 were not only saving money but
also
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 respecting their mother
nature
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. The first thing is
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people
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people's
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 mindsets
they
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, they
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 follow trends and fashion nowadays without
realizing
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realising
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 how much waste they are causing example, clothes and other household accessories and when they
could not
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cannot
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 find those attractive or good enough
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, then
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then
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they
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throwing
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throw them
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 out. They think
if
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that if
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 they
will
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apply
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use
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 the same thing
again
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again,
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 it will affect their image among friends and society. Individuals just buy
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things
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things,
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use
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them one
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one
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once
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 time and throw
those
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them
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 out.
Moreover
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, industries do production of
things
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 which once made cannot be destroyed,
reuse
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reused
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and
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or
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recycle
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recycled
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. For
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for instance
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, polyethene is
selling
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sold
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 in shops,
convivence
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convenience
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 stores
etcetera
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, etcetera
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 which
people
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are
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apply
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also
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buying
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buy
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 to carry their stuff
like
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, like
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 groceries
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instead
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, instead
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 of eco-friendly
bags
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bags,
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 just to pay
little
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a little
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 less money. Governments
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also
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are also
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 not taking any action regarding these serious issues. In fact,
authority
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the authority
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 should totally
put
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ban
over
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apply
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those
things
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 which are not suitable for
environment
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the environment
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 and can be
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use
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used
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 only
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one
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once
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time
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apply
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.
This
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 kind of material
affecting
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is affecting
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nature
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 very badly. In ancient times,
people
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try
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tried
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 to preserve and take care of everything they
have
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had
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but
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, but
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 nowadays it
Is
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is
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 totally opposite.
People
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 try to
use
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 what they
have already
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already have
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 and
use
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one
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 thing for different reasons. As mentioned above, polyethene like
material
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a material
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people
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that people
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 throw anywhere
which
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, which
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 animals and birds can
eat
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also eat
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 and get sick
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apply
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also
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. If they throw these
things
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 out after
one
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 time
use
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, it
also
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 increases garbage
which
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, which
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 is not eco-friendly at all and
destroying
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destroys
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nature
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 and natural resources. In conclusion, there are many factors to include. It is a duty of every individual
by
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to
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 not
following
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follow
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 stupid trendy rules
and
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, and
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government
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the government
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 should
also
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 ban
on
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apply
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the production of
material
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materials
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that
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is
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are
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 impossible to destroy and recycle. So,
environment
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the environment
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 should be
neat
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neat,
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 clean and eco-friendly by
recycle
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recycling
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 and
reuse
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reusing
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things
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.

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