Many old buildings protected by law are Partl of nation's history. Some think they should be knocked down and replaced by new ones. How important is it to maintain old building? Should history stand in the way of progress?

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ancient
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buildings
defended by law and order are
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part
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of
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history
. Few believe they should be knocked down and in that place construct new ones.
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buildings
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developments
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To begin
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maintenance
of ancient
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and foremost reason is, heritage sites and
buildings
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source
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of rich knowledge of our
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ages. To be more precise, we find
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important
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from many ancient remains of
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civilization
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survey of India found several
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of research from historical sites. Another notable reason is, old
buildings
can be a source of unity among different ideology
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because other culture people, who can visit those historical places, can understand
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ancient community easily and
also
they could cut some of the bad superstitions from their culture.
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important tool for each and every country to enhance their economy as well as social integrity between people of their own and different countries. Every individual can learn from mistakes that
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in past and
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their way of life. State
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from
history
as in
history
many tragic
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happened against high command.
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,
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and French
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were
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example
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progress. To sum up, heritage sites are very helpful in every aspect so
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should be protected
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every human being can know and care about
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