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People remember special gifts or presents that they have received. Why or why not? Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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What constitutes personal experiences and our memory of past events
continue
Correct subject-verb agreement
continues

It seems that the verb continue does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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 to be a fruitful
topic
Fix the agreement mistake
topics

It seems that topic may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 for both psychological and philosophical discussions. People give and receive presents on regular occasions during their day-to-day life. Do they remember the moments when it occurred and if they do, why?
This
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 essay will try to answer these questions. There could be named multiple reasons why people remember the gifts that they received.
Firstly
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, they are a physical manifestation of the memories. When someone sees a present that was received years ago, it still quickly brings memories of these events to the mind.
Secondly
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, these presents are
also
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 signs of personal connections with others. These relations are immaterial
hence
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 people could not see them,
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however
Add the comma(s)
,however

It appears that you are missing a comma or two with the interrupter however. Consider adding the comma(s).

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 there is still a strong desire to have material signs of them and gifts successfully perform
this
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 role. Previously, we have demonstrated a few reasons why the memories of the gifts that were given to us could stay alive during
the
Change the word
our

The word the may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

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 lifetime. It is obvious to me that
this
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 is the case for most situations, except, possibly,
a cases
Correct the article-noun agreement
a case
cases

The indefinite article a may not be required with the plural noun cases in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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 where it does not occur due to physical or psychological reasons. It is clearly shown by the fact, that I still remember many presents that I got in my childhood.

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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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