Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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should study whatever they want. While
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others argued that universities compulsory those subject
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which
helps in the
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those subjects or
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which they like, they would very well
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concentration
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they only learn, they can not make
future
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benefits
to students which they follow ambitions. Nowadays,
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increased in every field. So, it is
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beneficial
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education
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which they like. Because if children learn all subject they can not focus on every
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.
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the study.
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important role in
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parents
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think that they could not
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their dream. So,
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future
.
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reason
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they did not
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enrolled
in the doctors because they want. In
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children can not focus on
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the study
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because he/she
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to become
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an engineer
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engineer
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engineers
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On the other hand
, some
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subjects
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such
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a computer
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are very important
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field. These days , technology has spread in every
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. So , people have
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knowledge
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computer
science. Multinational companies recruit those people who have
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. For
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, TCS company
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employees
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any graduate
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they
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know
computer
language and basic communication skills. In conclusion, students follow their ambitions and achieve their goal
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education.
Although
, they
also
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knowledge of basic
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concerns
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which
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are important
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in the
future
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