Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, others think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both ways and give your opinion.

Getting a job is difficult because it requires skills, talents and a lot of effort. Education is something that could help a lot
on
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finding the
first
job and even
more
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if you have completed a
university
, the recruiters
definetly
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definitely
will look
you
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different
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from the others
without
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.
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to succeed in a field
experience
and developing soft skills will be needed as well. In
this
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I will give my opinion that completing
university
and getting
experience
are both needed for a
successfull
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successful
career by giving examples. There are different kinds of
jobs
to work and some will require a diploma. Finance and law are fields that a diploma or certificate are
mandatories
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mandatory
. To grow in
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position
it
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will require more certificates and studying.
This
jobs
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in general
pays
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higher salaries and will demand more at some point it will demand a lot of soft skills as well. Working
on
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a supermarket will not require a
university
and it is probably easy to find and get
this
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jobs
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. In
general
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this
jobs
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does not require
experience
and the worker will learn how to operate by working. But it
is know
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that to grow and obtain senior positions and
managment
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management
positions education is highly necessary and it is much easier to have a
succes
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success
career if you have a diploma. In conclusion, to
succed
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succeed
in a field it is very important to invest
on
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education and certification.
Therefore
, it is possible to get a job without a
university
but in
this
situation the chances to grow and get higher earnings are much less. After these examples to
succes
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success
succeed
in any
field
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it is very important a combination of
experience
and study.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured and comprehensive understanding
  • specialized skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving abilities
  • career advancement
  • networking opportunities
  • internships
  • alumni associations
  • career services
  • practical experience
  • hands-on skills
  • trades, arts, and technology
  • soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • real-world working environment
  • job performance
  • career growth
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