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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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In the modern era,
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 from
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 place to another has become
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, faster and cheaper, and the same we can state about learning about different cities and countries or even looking for a new job or career.
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, many adults choose to stay where they were born to study, work and
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 raise their
family
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.
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, there are a few incentives to study and work in a place you are familiar with because you know what are the best school, you have easier
acess
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access
 to information and people reviews,
you
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and you
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 have friends and contacts to help you with whatever you might need and the most import thing, you have your family support. Moving elsewhere might lead you to situations where you are out of your
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comfort
 zone and without
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support
, and most people would rather avoid those
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 of situations.
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, there are a few
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advantages
 and disadvantages we can point out about moving or not when we grow up. Starting a new life somewhere else may give you new opportunities,
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 as a great job opportunity or meeting the love of your life.
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, a new country perhaps may offer you
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infraestructure
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infrastructure
 or lifestyle.
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, there are some negative points as well
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 as lack of support and friends around
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 difficulties with different cultures and habits that can impact your personal
well being
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 and sometimes even affect
you
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 mental health. In conclusion, there are facilities
sorounding
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surrounding
 making a living
by
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in
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 the place you were born
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besides
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 the fact of having to let go
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of new
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 experiences you could have by making your own path in a new country. Choosing
were
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where
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 to spend your life and create roots is a challenging decision that
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involves
 a lot of thinking and
weightining
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weighting
weighing
 of positive and negative points.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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