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Some people believe that giving aid to poorer countries has more negative effects than positive effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The argument over whether giving
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aids
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 to less developed
countries
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 has positive or negative impacts has not been settled yet. It seems to me that
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 really depends on
different
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 kinds of
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aids
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 given by developed
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.
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 with, some
aids
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 like offering monetary assistance have harmful effects on poorer
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. It is true that
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 kind of aid can increase a country’s income directly in a rather short period of time, but it does not
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 long because once the financial aid is run out of, the country will become poor again. In the long run, some poorer
countries
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 tend to rely on
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 aid and take it for granted
instead
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 of working hard to improve their living conditions. Once they don’t receive financial help
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, they would be faced with even worse situations due to laziness and even corruption among authorities.
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 the other hand, there are other forms of
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 which can make a great difference
to
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 poor
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’ development. Compared with giving money directly,
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aids
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 including providing medical assistance,
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 help as well as assisting poorer
countries
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 to build roads and railways aim to improve local people’s living conditions in a long run.
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, these types of
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aids
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 contribute to
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 well-being of poorer
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.
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, many developed
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 invest
factories
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in factories
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 in those poorer ones and introduce advanced technology in local communities, which helps to improve locals’ lives on their own. Only in
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 way can poorer
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 get rid of poverty fundamentally. In conclusion, when rich
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 offer
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aids
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 to poorer nations, they should consider what kinds of assistance benefit the latter to the largest extent and
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help them out of poverty.
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