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Write about the following topic. information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling. etc.). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #information #technology #people #work #workplace #e #g #home #mobility
A 36-year-old male reported to the Department of Periodontics with a chief complaint of a small single painful boil on the gum of
left
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the left
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 upper posterior tooth from the
last
 10
days
. He had a history of Covid-19 infection for which he was hospitalized 1 month back with
high grade
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 fever with cough, generalised weakness and mild difficulty in breathing. Symptomatic supportive treatment was done with antiviral, IV antibiotic, IV steroid and
inj
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in
ink
. Remdesivir during his hospital
admit
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. He was discharged after 15
days
 with a negative Covid-19 RT-PCR report and negative KOH (potassium hydroxide) nasal swab report. During discharge, nasal endoscopy and MRI PNS with contrast were normal. The
patient
 had a history of intake of multivitamins, antacids, antibiotics and methylprednisolone 8mg twice daily for three
days
 after discharge along with seven
days
 of home quarantine. On clinical examination, an abscess was present in the attached gingiva of tooth # 24 which was tender on percussion. The tooth was examined to rule out fracture and trauma from occlusion. Intraoral periapical radiograph revealed no significant findings. The abscess was curetted and irrigated with
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povidine-iodine
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povidone-iodine
providing-iodine
 solution [Figure 1A]. After 5
days
, the
patient
 developed severe pain in the
palatal
 region and mobility in the anterior left front
teeth
. On clinical examination, grade 2 mobility along with tenderness on percussion was present in
teeth
 # 21, 22, 23, and 24. Painful
palatal
 swelling was
also
 prominent in the left pre-
maxillary
 region. As
symptoms
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 of the
patient
 had aggravated, emergent CBCT was advised avoiding
OPG
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 view. In CBCT, complete opacification of the left
maxillary
 sinus with air entrapment was evident. Multiple ill-defined osteolytic lesions with irregular borders extending from the distal aspect of
nasopalatine
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the nasopalatine
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 canal with involvement of both the buccal and
palatal
 cortices of the left
maxillary
 region were seen. Destruction of the buccal and
palatal
 alveolus was present from
teeth
 # 21 to 26 giving it a moth-eaten appearance.
Distal
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 wall of the left nasal fossa was involved. The floor of the
maxillary
 sinus was breached on the left side in
teeth
 # 24, 25, and 26 regions, but intact on the right side. Perforation of the sinus floor in the 26 and 27 regions was
also
 seen [Figure 1B]. Immediately without any delay, the
patient
 was referred to the
medicine
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 emergency ward with
suspected
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a suspected
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 diagnosis of mucormycosis
post Covid-19
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post-Covid-19
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. The pre and
post contrast
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post-contrast
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 multiplanar MR imaging of paranasal sinuses and
histopathological
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the histopathological
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 report confirmed the diagnosis of mucormycosis involving the left
maxillary
 alveolus, perialveolar tissues and left middle turbinate.
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