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Some People Believe That Professionals Such As Doctors And Engineers Should Be Required To Work In The Country Where They Did Their Training.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
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Society has the opinion about working in the same
country
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 for skilled workers
such
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 as
Doctore
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doctors
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 and Engineers because they get training developed by the government. The opposite views from some
people
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, they are free to decide on their
job
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 even go abroad. I will provide my opinion. I agree
about
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 the first statement. Education today is expansive,
such
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 as medicine and engineering faculty. The
country
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 giving scholarships to
people
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 is good. But, after graduation, fresh graduates can choose a free
country
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 to get the opportunity. Working in other countries is an excellent opportunity to develop their careers and earn more money.
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, deciding on a
job
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 place is a Human right if they choose on
job
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 places. Even the government had to provide skills education for they are. Humanity's value is the principal value of life.
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,
people
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 in Indonesia go abroad to find a
job
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have
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 advantages like sand back money to home and
country
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 getting feedback from foreign exchange.
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, regarding human rights, when employees are not comfortable working in their
country
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, they can move to another
country
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.
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, the US has a law that
people
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 can choose their
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job
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jobs
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 in other countries even if they have scholarships from the government. The US
country
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 believes that
people
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 have chosen to work
aboard
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abroad
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.
To sum up
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, choosing a
job
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 abroad is a personal choice because of human rights, and
people
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 have the opportunity to earn money. More benefits for the
country
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 get foreign exchange.
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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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