The demand for food is increasing worldwide. Why has it happened? What measures could the international community take to improve the situation?

In the
last
few years, the quantity of
food
needed is growing in so many areas.
This
is a situation from which humanity cannot really escape because of the number of
world's
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population that
reaces
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reaches
the eight million people in
whole
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world and the certain need to eat to survive. In
this
essay, I am going to try to describe a possible cause and
to
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find
an
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hypothetic solution.
First
of all, is important to underline that even if is full of zones where the
food
is not enough there are
also
others where a single person eats a huge quantity of bad quality
food
. In fact, in develop
countries
a lot of people in the
last
time became obese.
This
example shows how the world is
complitly
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completely
divided: poor
countries
export
them
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resource to the rich ones which waste and consume
to
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much
food
. In my opinion, a great solution could be to try to come back to the "old method", I mean to create in each big rich city an area for a common vegetables garden and farm where each member of
community
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can contribute and take good
food
, avoiding waste and unhealthy products. In
this
way, poor
countries
will not be
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anymore to produce meat for fast
food
,
consequently
, they can take part in
this
project. In conclusion, I think that humans should remember their origins and try to recreate them. The planet gives us a huge resource of
food
and we should dive
equal
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between
countries
to guarantee
a
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the
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right diet
to
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everyone.
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