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A tendency of news reported in the media about problems and emergencies rather than positive developments is more harmful to the individual and to society. Do you agree or disagree?

#tendency #news #media #emergencies #developments #society
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In
this
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 modern era,
media
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 has influential on our daily life to get know about
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information around the globe.
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, some
people
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 harbour argues that nowadays
media
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 covers majorly problems and emergencies which create negative vibes for themselves and for society.In
this
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 essay, I will elaborate on the beneficial and adverse aspects of
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 trend and
thus
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 lead to a logical conclusion. There
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 myriad reasons to agree with the meritorious reasons.
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 of all, with the aid of electronic gadgets, frequently get updates from the
media
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 to
people
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. In recent years, the
media
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 telecasted information majorly on criminal activities and global warming.
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,
people
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 aware of these issues, give
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contribute
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 to solving these problems.
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, In a recent survey, 4 % of
people
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 stopped using non-eco-friendly vehicles with the influence of the
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. Needless to say, all these points stand in good stead. To get more specifics, the
media
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 played a major role in the Russian and Uranium clash wars, many
people
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 from different nations condemn
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the Russian
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halt
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the
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 war and gave hospitality to
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injuried
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injured
people
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.
By contrast
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, negative
speard
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spread
 of the news in the
media
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 which
create
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a
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bad
vibes
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to
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people
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lead
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 to mental depression.
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, it's apparent why many
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the
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people
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 are against
this
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 trend. In recapitulation, definitely true that the
media
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 has to cover up the majority
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problems due to catastrophic issues ,especially climate change. In case, the problem has not
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 properly in the
media
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,
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which
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 create disasters for
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living creature.
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, I firmly agree with the given statement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sensationalism
  • desensitization
  • skewed perception
  • mental health
  • culture of fear
  • paranoia
  • mistrust
  • positive reinforcement
  • awareness
  • emergencies
  • issues
  • anxiety
  • stress
  • media bias
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