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Newspapers have an enormous influence on people’s opinions and ideas. Do you think it is a positive or negative situation?

#newspapers #influence #people’s #situation
With the advancement in modern technology,
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have
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a magnificient
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magnificent
 impact on
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 view and idea.
This
 has led to
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 rise in the percentage of effect on the crowd decision. If asked, I would say that it is beneficial
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 society. Discussing the
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positive
 influence of the presence of the
press
, the foremost is that they are considered as
most
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 reliable source of
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information
.
Therefore
, even in
this
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modern
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 many individuals read it daily.
For instance
, in countries like India, where there are many languages, they often trust
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 from
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.
Furthermore
, journals publish all
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on
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 information or
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advertisement
advertisements
 using it crowds are changing
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their
 decision. They read it in order to learn the current affairs
thus
 in developing countries it is a common
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practice
 that if an individual wants to buy a new property they will check for an
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advertisement
first
.
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, due to
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 in
technology
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 these
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publishing
 companies have developed their phone application in order to allow users to read
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 from
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or
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 phone.
For instance
, Time of India allows its
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customer
customers
 to read its daily
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 from its phone application.
Moreover
, there are many fake
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 are
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trending
 on social media, and it
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difficult
 for a common person to validate that information,
thus
 reading new papers one can verify it.
Thus
, considering all the things,
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have
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huge
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 effect on an
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individual
 life. The most vital
this
 is trust among the population.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • opinions
  • perspectives
  • crucial
  • informing
  • educating
  • biased
  • sensationalized
  • shape
  • attitudes
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