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how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Bar chart here depicts the percentage of time how
parents
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 take care of their
children
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 in the evening in the year 2022, together as well as individually in terms of dressing, homework, playing games and preparing for bed.
Both
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parents
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 are equally responsible for taking care of their
children
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, in
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 bar chart it is clearly visible that for dressing up the child
mothers
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 are more involved around 75%,
fathers
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 are not much engaged,
both
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parents
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 are tangled by 22%.
Mothers
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 help more to the child for doing homework 50%,
fathers
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 are winded by 10% and
both
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parents
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 are helping around 38% finish
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 homework.
Both
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parents
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 are able to give time to the
children
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 for playing games which
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 70%,
fathers
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 are busy with their work, so they are not including themselves here more than5%,
mothers
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 are able to focus 25%. Father's contribution to preparing the bed is the same as playing games,
mothers
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 are doing 41% but
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 together are giving there 50% each. To sum up
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 chart, I have seen that
mothers
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 are more involved in
children
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's all activities if compared with
fathers
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, and
both
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 together are able to manage on the same page.

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