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how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The Bar chart here depicts the percentage of time how
parents
 take care of their
children
 in the evening in the year 2022, together as well as individually in terms of dressing, homework, playing games and preparing for bed.
Both
parents
 are equally responsible for taking care of their
children
, in
this
 bar chart it is clearly visible that for dressing up the child
mothers
 are more involved around 75%,
fathers
 are not much engaged,
both
parents
 are tangled by 22%.
Mothers
 help more to the child for doing homework 50%,
fathers
 are winded by 10% and
both
parents
 are helping around 38% finish
the
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 homework.
Both
parents
 are able to give time to the
children
 for playing games which
are
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 70%,
fathers
 are busy with their work, so they are not including themselves here more than5%,
mothers
 are able to focus 25%. Father's contribution to preparing the bed is the same as playing games,
mothers
 are doing 41% but
both
 together are giving there 50% each. To sum up
this
 chart, I have seen that
mothers
 are more involved in
children
's all activities if compared with
fathers
, and
both
 together are able to manage on the same page.
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