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Some say that young and energetic employees are the more valuable for the company, others argue that older employees have more experience and knowledge. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples, based on you own experience.

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A big part of our society supposes that young and full of an energy
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company
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 are more suitable for the projects.
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 others think that older and more experienced employees are the best option for the group. Society is split into two parts. On the one hand, the younger generation of
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company
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 breath to the
company
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 new, vital ideas which could help to improve the
company
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 and their
products
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 so the employer could become more modern and full of innovations.
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, successful technological giants
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 as Google or Amazon are searching for young, talented employees who could bring innovations, these
companies
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 understand that only young people who are full of energy could help to build an advanced, innovational
company
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,
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 mindset is a vital part of
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's philosophy.
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, technological
companies
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 launch
products
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 mostly for youngsters so only young
workers
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 could understand the needs of youngsters because they are individuals from the same generation.
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, young
workers
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 do not afraid of anything because they have nothing to lose so they are able to build highly innovative
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.
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, experienced
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 give
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the
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big
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 stability. Throw out their experience and knowledge they could avoid mistakes which might destroy the project.
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 type of employee is less stressed and patient because they have already made similar mistakes throw out their career.
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, a football team which lacks
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veterans can not reach high achievement because experience which could suggest experienced
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 has a massive impact on the team's success.
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 kind of team is lack
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stability so their results are unstable.
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, experienced
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 because of their knowledge could manage highly qualified work so
products
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 which are made by experienced employees most likely have high quality. To sum up, In my opinion young, talented
workers
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 are more important for modern
companies
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 because they could breathe new ideas and help to understand the needs of the younger generation.

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