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Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true is this statement? How far does colour influence people’s health and capacity for work?

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Although
 we learn about
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 from a young age,
colors
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 do not let
me
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 know the essence of something in life. I can illustrate
this
 with some examples from life. Just like an apple, there are not only red but
also
 green and so on. But we can'
t
 say that red is necessarily tastier than green, so in my opinion
color
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 is not important to a large extent.
This
 is especially true in offices and
hospitals
. According to the actual situation,
people
 in the enterprise do not care much about the
color
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 of the workplace. In
the
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public opinion, when
people
 focus on their
work
, they don'
t
 care about their surroundings, they just put their heart and soul into their
work
. If the environment will affect their
work
 efficiency, a large part of the reason may be that they do not calm down to
work
 or do not have professional quality. Not only that, in some
people
's view
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the company's professional strength will be more important than the
decoration
color
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 of the company. Because an enterprise's income will not change because of the
decoration
color
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. What's more interesting is that over time
people
 get used to the place where they
work
 and they think that
color
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 doesn'
t
 matter or they just ignore it. Because they see the same
colors
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 and decorations almost every day, they don'
t
 feel
the
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decoration
 and
color
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 matching is important at the moment.
For these
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people
, they will feel satisfied that the salary will be more important than the
color
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 of
decoration
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.
Work
 is for output and
hospitals
 are for
people
's health.
Therefore
, a hospital with
a
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higher professional quality will make patients feel more at ease than a hospital with good
color
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decoration
. And doctors are so busy that they may not even notice the
colors
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 around them. Not only that, there are patients in some wards for certain reasons,
such
 as coma and so on. You may not even see the
colors
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 around you. So
color
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 is largely unimportant in
hospitals
. To sum up, we can learn that
color
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 is superior to professionalism.
People
 ignore
color
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 when they are focused on doing something.
This
 means that
color
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 is largely unimportant in serious places like studios or
hospitals
.
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