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a company has announced that it wishes to built a large factory near to your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? explain your position.

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Nowadays is more common than in the past to live near a
factory
, in fact with the advent of ,
technology
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 some big companies are expanding their horizons. Some may think that there are more pros than cons, but, in my humble opinion, I do not agree with
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that
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. In fact, even if the presence of a
factory
 could improve the economical situation of a community,
on the other
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 it causes several environmental damages,
hence
 in
this
 essay I will discuss in detail these two points to justify my view.
To begin
 with, an area can improve its economic situation if some big factories are near it.
This
 happens because a big industry needs to have a lot of employees, so it creates more opportunities to get a job.
For instance
, more families, in
this
 way, can improve
thier
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their
 life condition.
Moreover
, the place itself ,becoming richer, can enhance its service, so offer more attention in the care of the public space,
such
 as the parks or the square.
On the other hand
, it is clear that a
factory
 led to
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more
pollution
, including air
pollution
, noise
pollution
 and water
pollution
. So we have to pay attention to the consequence of it, not only for the earth
,
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 but
also
 for the inhabitants and for the animals of the zone. In fact, the location of the
factory
 could be located in an isolated place, where there might be the home of several animals. In conclusion, even if the opportunity to have a
factory
 could improve some aspects of the life of people, there are more disadvantages than advantages. So to preserve our health it is important to keep in mind that and not opt for the more convenient option but for the more
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
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  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
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  • economic growth
  • infrastructure development
  • local businesses
  • unemployment rates
  • pollution
  • residents' health
  • noise and traffic congestion
  • social tensions
  • community dynamics
  • boost the local economy
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