Recently most of the people showing their interest to migrate in cities rather than villages and towns. Discuss both sides and provide your conclusion.

Nowadays, it is known that the biggest part of the population is migrating to cities rather than other uncrowded places.
Hence
, I completely agree with
this
statement and I think that one of the reasons
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this
situation is thanks
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the
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accommodations. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument.
First
of all, we can see that
metropolis
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is every time more populated and one of the most substantial
point
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is
because
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the younger immigrants.
Thus
, they are finding new opportunities in these lands, many want to start a new
seasson
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season
in their study-life or work-life and some
instead
just are looking for entertainment.
Moreover
,
this
is occurring because the city
have
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more job offers,
for instance
, the big companies are increasing their employers in order to rise business.
Also
, indeed is easier and more recommendable to study in
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way in the universities that are used to be
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the big cities.
Furthermore
,
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center
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is plenty of different kinds of shops,
cinema
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,
museum
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,
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and several kinds of more recreative places that are
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struggle to find in villages.
On the other hand
, we can find a tiny proportion of people far from these areas. They often are the older community that
are
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looking for
tranquility
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and peace in their retirement.
For example
, many of them have
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lived
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their young
seasson
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season
in the metropolis,
however
, now are
prefering
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preferring
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life. Apart from these, we have some families that have
choosen
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chosen
upbringing
child's
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in more quiet towns. In short, many youngers are choosing
moving
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out to overcrowded places in search
potentially
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better options,
in other words
, in order to have a good future.
This
is happening while the other country parts are starting to be depopulated as a consequence.
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