Recently most of the people showing their interest to migrate in cities rather than villages and towns. Discuss both sides and provide your conclusion.

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Nowadays, it is known that the biggest part of the population is migrating to cities rather than other uncrowded places.

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accommodations. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument.

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of all, we can see that

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is every time more populated and one of the most substantial

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because

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the younger immigrants.

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, they are finding new opportunities in these lands, many want to start a new

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in their study-life or work-life and some

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just are looking for entertainment.

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this

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is occurring because the city

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more job offers,

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, the big companies are increasing their employers in order to rise business.

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, indeed is easier and more recommendable to study in

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way in the universities that are used to be

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the big cities.

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urban

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the urban

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center

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is plenty of different kinds of shops,

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museum

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and several kinds of more recreative places that are

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struggle to find in villages.

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, we can find a tiny proportion of people far from these areas. They often are the older community that

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looking for

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and peace in their retirement.

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, many of them have

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their young

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in the metropolis,

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, now are

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life. Apart from these, we have some families that have

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in more quiet towns. In short, many youngers are choosing

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out to overcrowded places in search

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better options,

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, in order to have a good future.

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is happening while the other country parts are starting to be depopulated as a consequence.

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