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Search Results Some people prefer to live in hot climates whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climates Discuss both views and explain which climate you prefer

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There are two
climates
 that the world can basically be categorized
to
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into
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, hot
climates
 and cold
climates
. Because of the difference in
climate
, the
people
 that live in
these
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this area
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area
 have different lifestyles. In general, there
are
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 no right or wrong nor there is one lifestyle
that is
 better than the other. The hot
climates
 are the
climate
 located
in
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at
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 the equator. They have only two
season
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seasons
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, which is
hot
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the hot
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season
 and
cold
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the cold
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season
. The
people
 who
life
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live
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 in
these
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this area
these areas
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area
 usually need fans or air conditioner units to keep them cool enough during the hot summer. They
also
 use thinner
clothes
 to cool themselves.
Depend
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 on the
area
,
people
 would wear full
covering
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covered
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clothes
 in a dryer
area
such
 as the desert, but some would wear
a
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shorter
clothes
 in a more humid
area
such
 as the tropical jungle. The cold
climates
 are the opposite as they are closer to the poles of the earth. They have four
season
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seasons
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 and still could get quite hot in the summer. Though,
through out
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throughout
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 the year the temperature
are
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is
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 cooler than the hot
climate
. They would spend more energy
in
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using
heater
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a heater
the heater
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 to keep warm during the winter. They would need to use thick
clothes
 when they need to do some activities outside. In some
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areas
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area
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,area
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 the snowfall could get really extreme and would make going from one to
other
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another area
other areas
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area
 difficult. So it's not uncommon for
people
 to stock some canned food in
the
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case of
emergency
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an emergency
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. Again, the two
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 are different but none are better than the other. It's just a matter of getting accustomed and preferences. For some
people
 that love doing outdoor activities, living in
the
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a
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 hot
climate
 is better. But for some
people
 who dislike getting too hot, living in
the
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a
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 cold
area
 is better. For me, I prefer to live in the hot
climate
 as it's where I live right now and what I'm accustomed to.
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