Many governments think that economic grow is their most important goal. Some people, however, thinks that other type of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Economics is a powerful tool and it determines the country's wealth. Some
people
harbour a belief that the country should concentrate on economic growth, while other
people
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to focus
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problems than economic growth. In
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essay, I will elaborate more detail from both views and
thus
lead to a logical conclusion. There
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adequate evidence
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substantiated reasons. The top-notch concrete reason is many countries is the primary focus to achieve the economic target. To fulfil the basic demands of the citizen by providing job opportunities, encouraging innovative ideas to implement things in a better way, and better infrastructure.
Moreover
, it enhances
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to build a new
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between two countries by importing
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to gain
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profit from it.
For instance
, China's economic growth rate drastically increased over the past years by focusing on
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wealth.Needless to say, all these points stand in good stead. What is known as half full for
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may appear
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half for some
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people
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to distinguish that other things
also
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priority. A pivotal aspect of
this
argument is that
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issue
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became threats to
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entire nations.
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,
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number of crimes in
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area
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. The Government need to focus on those issues to find
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solution to tackle these problems.
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, it's apparent why many
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this
trend. In recapitulation, I reiterate that there are innumerable strong factors supporting that
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issues and
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of
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also
need to give equal priority as same like
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sector. By owning to these stated reasons,
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profoundly
belief
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that developing countries would definitely grow by giving
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equal priority.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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