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Government spend millions of dollars esch years on their space programms. most recently , Mars is the focus of scientists' attention . some people think thi money would be better spend on dealing with problems closer to home. do you agree or disagree ?

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Nowadays,
Space
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 programme is a sign of developed countries. These governments addicted a large portion of their annual budget to
this
 kind of research. In the following
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 I am going to discuss
about
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my point of view regarding
this
 matter ,
furthermore
, in the end, I will summarize some recommendations about who I think should spend
fund
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funds
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 on
space
 matters.
First
 of all, I completely agree with
this
 argument that every government should spend
fund
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funds
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 to
helping
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 and
feeding
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their people
instead
 of
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 on finding life on Mars. The authorities should put their citizen's comfort and welfare,
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the
first
 priority and
then
 focus on exploring
unknown
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 universe out there.
However
, some of them are so selfish that do not think and feel like me.
Although
, I believe that in our modern
life
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,life
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 while everything become more technological , each country that
find
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 out more about
scientific
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the scientific
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 issue is more powerful than the others. For
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instance
instane
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 a country with bigger
laboratory
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, more universities, a higher rank in producing knowledge and investing more capital in
space
 exploration no doubt is a developed one .
Therefore
, I disagree with those
whose
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 are against
space
 programmes. In conclusion, I highly recommend that
the
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governments
outsourcing
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 these kinds of projects to NGOs,
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 in the USA , Ilan Mask is a very rich man who is trying to send a
space ship
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 to Mars and with his
wealth
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this
 dream is so close.
Moreover
, he is helping his nation,
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and his
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his
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 country
also
 does not spend more than necessary for
this
 matter.
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