Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult such as the Sahara desert and Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages of visiting this area?

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Nowadays, there is

the

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increasing number of people who are willing to travel to places where conditions are extreme. In

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essay, I would like to point out the pros and cons for

travelers

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who are willing to do so.

To begin

with, there are several benefits to visiting

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area

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. One could witness the untouched beauty and serene landscapes all by themselves.

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is because touristy locations are ideal

bustling

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and full of people wandering around.

Secondly

, they could have a sense of

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a person

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who is climbing the infamous mountain

Everest

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not only for the experience but

also

for their personal achievement.

On the other hand

, there are several disadvantages regarding travelling to

such

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area

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, I would like to emphasize that it is difficult to find an ambulance or a hospital in places far from the city.

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, if a person is injured or has a fear of heights, they need a doctor, but the doctor is only in urban areas, so I think

this

is the main cons.

Furthermore

, The Sahara desert is extremely hot. In its heat, many unpleasant situations occur,

such

as burns, rashes, or sunstroke. Antarctica is the complete opposite of the desert, it’s very cold, of course, which

also

leads to unconsciousness. In conclusion. Travelling to locations where conditions are extreme could have disadvantages

such

as limited medical services, high

cost

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of travelling around, delays and insurance coverage even

through

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they might find untouched beauty and have a

since

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of achievement. In my point of view, the cons outweigh the pros clearly and the nation who are willing to travel there should

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really

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research and plan well before making the trips.

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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult such as the Sahara desert and Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages of visiting this area?

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