Some people think the housing shortage in big cities is caused by relevant policies so this problem can be solved by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Population
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The population
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of the world is increasing and
this
situation results in several problems
such
as lack of water, limited
oppurtunities
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opportunities
for living , and ,particularly, housing shortage.
Majority
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The majority
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of people blame governments and relevant authorities for
restriction
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the restriction
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of construction in big cities.
Although
it seems like the whole fault originated from policies, I do not agree with the issue can be fixed by the government.
To begin
with, most of the big cities are suffering from high rent prices because of
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inbalance
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imbalance
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between demand and supply
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to
the
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houses.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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