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how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants

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Introduction
The provided bar graph display how frequently
individuals
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 in the USA
visit
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 fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Body paragraph 1
As can be seen from the given bar graph
people
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 generally choose to eat once a
week
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 or once or twice a
month
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 between 2003 and 2013.
Body paragraph 2
Individuals
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 who
choosed
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chose
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 to
visit
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everyday
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 and never stay
as
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in
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 the least group by more or less %5
on
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apply
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the
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all years.
Body paragraph 3
In 2003, %32 sit on top,
people
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 who
choosed
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chose
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 once or twice a
month
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 follows that by %30.
People
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 who selected to
visit
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 several
times
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 a
week
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 and a few
times
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 a year
Body paragraph 4
are by around %17 and %12 which is
almostly
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almost
 half of
peop
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people
,
people
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 who ate once a
week
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 in fast food
restaruants
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restaurants
 by around le who ate once a
wee
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week
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 and once or twice a
month
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.
Body paragraph 5
In 2006,the situation is
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almost
almostly
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almost
same
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the same
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 with 2003, yet
difference
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the difference
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 between the years
are
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is
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individuals
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 who
visit
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 fast food restaurants several
times
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 a
week
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 and a
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few
times
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 a year increased to %20 and %15 while
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people
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the people
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 who
visit
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 once or twice dropped to 25%.
Body paragraph 7
Lastly
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, In 2013,
individuals
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 who
visit
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 once or twice a
month
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climbing
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 to
highest
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the highest
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percentage
persentage
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percentage
 by
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almost
almostly
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almost
 %33, respectively, while once a
week
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 dropped to around %27
Conclusion
which was the least
persentage
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percentage
 on ıts line all the years on graph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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