Nowadays, many parents are sending their kids abroad to acquire good education. But, if and when these foreign educated students get back to their native country, they find it difficult to adjust themselves to the work life there. What kind of challenges do the people educated overseas face in their own country? What advice would you offer such people? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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is an amazing and so productive experience, a lot of them, once return to their home country, present some problems to add their expectation to the new real

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life there. In my opinion, even if

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in another country gives you

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skills,

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knoldagement are made for

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culture

and expectation of another place. In fact, the biggest

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to study in one country and

work

in another is to find the differents in routine and

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between the two

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and try to translate all you learned in a way that can help you to have a great career. To illustrate, the

year I would like to go to study in the Netherlands and speaking with a girl that already studies there I found that there is normal

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a lot of team works. On the

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Italy

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is extraordinary, for sure is absolutely not what we can find in a normal Italian student routine.

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to the

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world.

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case begins as much as possible multitasking:

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efficently

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as alone as in

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. In conclusion, change is always a challenge as much as

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back to their own origin after a new lifestyle and standards and the best way to survive and have

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flexible.

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