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Nowadays, many parents are sending their kids abroad to acquire good education. But, if and when these foreign educated students get back to their native country, they find it difficult to adjust themselves to the work life there. What kind of challenges do the people educated overseas face in their own country? What advice would you offer such people? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
 new era, a lot of
family
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families
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 choose to
incurage
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encourage
 their kids to become
an
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apply
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exchange
students
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.
Although
,
this
 is an amazing and so productive experience, a lot of them, once return to their home country, present some problems to add their expectation to the new real
work
 life there. In my opinion, even if
study
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 in another country gives you
previus
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previous
 skills,
this
 knoldagement are made for
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the colture
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colture
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culture
and expectation of another place. In fact, the biggest
difficult
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difficulty
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 to study in one country and
work
 in another is to find the differents in routine and
requirement
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requirements
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 between the two
system
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systems
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 and try to translate all you learned in a way that can help you to have a great career. To illustrate, the
next
 year I would like to go to study in the Netherlands and speaking with a girl that already studies there I found that there is normal
do
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 a lot of team works. On the
countrary
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contrary
 in
Italy
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,Italy
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team
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teamwork
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work
 is extraordinary, for sure is absolutely not what we can find in a normal Italian student routine.
As a result
,
this
 is a
real
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 big
different
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difference
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 and it can
also
be extend
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 to the
work
 world.
Therefore
, good advice
in
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this
 case begins as much as possible multitasking:
be
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being
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 able to
work
efficently
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efficiently
 as alone as in
group
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. In conclusion, change is always a challenge as much as
go
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going
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 back to their own origin after a new lifestyle and standards and the best way to survive and have
succes
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success
 is
begin
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to begin
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 flexible.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reverse culture shock
  • work ethic
  • communication styles
  • professional networks
  • industry needs
  • market demands
  • qualifications
  • overqualified
  • integration strategies
  • alumni networks
  • innovative practices
  • flexible mindset
  • overseas experience
  • domestic workforce
  • readjustment
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