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The graph illustrates the information about the differences in average house prices in five cities from 1990 to 2002 compared with the value In 1989. From an overall perspective, London has the biggest change during the years, from minus 8% to positive 12%. Looking at the chart in more detail, we can see the percentage of the minus part from 1990 to 1995 include New York, Tokyo, and London, which data change in the average value of buildings each stand for -5%, 8%, and -8%.
Besides
, Frankfurt and Madrid are in the positive part, which is 2% and 3% in 1992 compared with 1989.
On the other hand
, the proportion of average prices in 1996 - 2002 is the most change to the top, including New York, Madrid Frankfurt, and London.
Moreover
, the UK has the biggest difference from 1989, which has a dramatic increase of 12%.
Besides
, New York's rapid growth to 5% in 1998, and Madrid's rise to 4%.
In addition
, Germany had a slight decrease to 2%. The
last
, Japan remain at the bottom part. but have risen to -5%.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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