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Some people argued that history is of little or no use. Others believe that studying history give many benefits. Discuss those views and give your own opinion?

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There are controversial conceptions heating up a debate over
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 paramount significant role
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history
. While some
people
 have a steadfast belief that learning about
history
 can benefit them in a variety of ways, others assert that
history
 has no bearing on their daily lives. The latter is somewhat true, but I would consider myself a supporter of the former. Without a shadow of
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, for the time being, The use of historical knowledge has ceased to be widely applied in everyday work because it has become partly obsolete.
Nevertheless
, we
also
 can't deny that
history
 has taught humanity a lot of lessons.
For example
, the talented general Ho Chi Minh of Vietnam used his practical knowledge to defend his country and that has been followed and passed down by the Vietnamese
people
 for generations.
Hence
, the study of
history
 is not crucial for almost all
people
 in society present. Even though the triviality of
history
 is well understood, its opposite persists.
People
 claim that taking historical research into consideration.
In addition
,
history
 recalls great
people
 and the valiant deeds that they performed that altered the course of
history
. Learning about the motivational occurrences that led to where we are now might inspire you greatly. To sum up, it is not essential for both adolescent and
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,
however
, it
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 a variety of wonders for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • insights
  • progression
  • values
  • beliefs
  • heritage
  • identity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • subjective
  • practical
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