PROPOSITION: Sending criminals to prison is not an effective method of dealing with them. Education and job training should be used instead. PROMPT: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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learning new things could be
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and the most reason why I agree with
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decreases
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to
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people
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after their punishments.
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person
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society
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according
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people
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of security.
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, if prisoners eliminate
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, they may not participate illegal ways, so
people
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could live together
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comfortable
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, in Norway, many quilty
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encorage
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encourage
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to learn new job skills and
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academic
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education.
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, the crime rate is less than
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countires
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countries
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. In conclusion,
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of only sending
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give
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some compulsory education to prisoners is
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effective notion and I agree with it because of reducing
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rate and improving
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of security. If
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will have
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