In marriages today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A few years ago, many people believed that in marriage, a man is obliged to provide for living, but over time, much has changed. These days, more and more couples prefer to pay for housing and everything necessary for life together, dividing the costs in half.
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to gain
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. The reason why it is necessary for both spouses to provide
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a living
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is
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financial independence and
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each other. Reaching a career in the workplace for women and men is common in the present day,
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a couple can earn a sufficient amount to maintain a good quality of life or provide for a family.
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, it helps to build the right and strong relationships in marriage, since most often
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are interested in different areas of business.
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, nowadays, women have
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good development and earnings in the beauty industry, while men prefer the construction businesses.
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,
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develop their worldviews by sharing various knowledge with each other that have a good impact on their children in the future.
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wives and husbands have different responsibilities as parents. Most of the time children spend with their mother and she is engaged in their upbringing.
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process takes a lot of effort, and most often females do not have time to work and earn money to ensure their children.
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, in
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case, the entire responsibility for providing the life of the family is on the man. A male has much more opportunities and better physical health for
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since he does not need to restore his body after pregnancy and childbirth. All in all, it is necessary for both
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to earn a living, but during the creation of a family, all
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responsibility passes to the man, since the woman has other duties.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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