Some people say that if old spend time and get along with others and exercise everydau they will become fit. However , these day older people are usually lonely and do not talk to others which makes them unfit and unhappy. Whta are the reason fot this? How can this be resolved?
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phones
masses
easily get information from google . Few individuals believe older like to spend their old time
with others
and they become more fit , whereas at present they do not like to talk with others
. I totally agree with this
statement and will discuss reasons
along with the solution in the upcoming paragraphs.
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the reasons
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why masses
do not like to spend their Correct article usage
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time
with others
. First
and foremost reason is that with the overuse of Correct article usage
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phones
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people do not like to spend their Add a comma
,internet
time
without their cellphone because there are
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the
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that is
making them feel lonely because they have a habit of using phones
and their bonds of relation maybe finish due to overuse of cellphone because they need time
as well as care from a person which each masses
not giving to others
and they near to end of their relations . For example
, in the year , 2015 a survey was conducted by UNO which was indicating about 75% of people lose their relationships due to spending their time
on mobile phones
rather then
folks .
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Moreover
, individuals have busy
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a busy
schedule
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schedules
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their companies and Change preposition
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it`s
pressure makes them unfit because they have Correct your spelling
its
work
which is only done on the computer so for
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it
they have a fixed place to Correct pronoun usage
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work
in offices and eating habits are more than any exercise so it is making them obesity
.
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On the other hand
, there are also
some solutions to overcome this
issue. If companies provide high prices on the internet so masses
do not like to buy plans or they like to talk with others
to gain more knowledge and they never feel lonely in any part of the world . For instance
, in the year , 2015 when prices of net packs were high and folks did not purchase any packs as well as they have a
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healthly
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healthy
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Furthermore
, if bosses provide less work
to their employees so masses
can give good results to their companies rather than more negative results and individuals have Correct article usage
the masses
time
to spend with their family to make a strong bond of relations as well as they can do exercise for good health .
In conclusion, if masses
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the masses
then
it is possible to make love in the world or one day it is maybe hate free and doing jobs under less work
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