In many countries, more and more people buy a wide range of household goods like television microwave oven and rice cooker. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

I believe it is both positive and negative development. In my opinion, producing various household goods for communities could make a better society but
also
affect the
environment
negatively. The reason why it could have a positive development on society is that residents are able to have a better quality of life as there are lots of facilities making a convenient way to live.
For example
, since microwaves have been designed, individuals could have an easier method and faster time to heat the food they going to eat rather than use pans or other materials to cook for a longer period.
In addition
, television could create another entertainment subject for
community
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, it contains various types of shows or movies to let people choose from, which is very popular for everyone whether they are elders or youth.
However
, more brand-new household products have made a
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development in
community
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,
it
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could
also
cause problems in
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and creatures.
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,
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an enormous amount of electronic goods have been produced in
industry
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. A substantial amount of waste could
also
create with them.
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garbage is very harmful
for
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environment
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and animals if it is not
disposed
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properly. It could easily pollute streams, soils, and the
fresh water
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uses
for
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human society or kills and eats
by
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animals
in
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accidently
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accidentally
. In conclusion,
manufacture
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convenient household goods
is
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letting people
to
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have a greater condition to live but if
produce
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too many products could cause lots of waste are dealing damage
in
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environment
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the environment
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and animals since there
are
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too much waste that can not
dispose
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all
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of them.
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