It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information.

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some individuals think if
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might be not a good
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have
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many advantages rather than negative impact if
people
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in a positive thing. On the one hand, cutting-edge technology makes
people
easy to communicate with others
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the
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cheap
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and
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opportunities to know new
people
. The main reason is
people
just pay
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connection
such
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inexpensive
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message
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and call their friends or families quickly on their
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.
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, it makes
people
easier to communicate
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or
people
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nation
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In addition
, because of the advancement of technology makes
people
also
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the majority of
people
used it.
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people
can know many
people
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,
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also
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drawback
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drawbacks
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if
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in a wise. Some
informations
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or news
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the
internet
may be not suitable for some
people
. There are a lot of negative
contents
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such
as porn
video
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videos
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or hate speech from others which make
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opinions
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For instance
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provides information but there is
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effects
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. To sum up,
although
internet
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is
bad
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a bad
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way
to find news since there is bad information,
but
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people
can manage themselves to get
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a positive
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thing
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things
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.
Moreover
,
internet
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in
this
era gives many positive impacts rather than negative
impact
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impacts
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which makes
people
can communicate easily and
cheap
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.
Moreover
, the development of technology makes
people
easy to other
people
.
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  • Democratize access
  • Instant messaging
  • Real-time conversations
  • Credible sources
  • Misinformation
  • Unverified facts
  • Reputable news outlets
  • Biased opinions
  • Algorithm-driven content
  • Overreliance
  • Traditional methods
  • Search engines
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