It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information.

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Some
people
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argue that the best
way
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to communicate with others is
by
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the
internet
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.
However
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,
for
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some individuals think if
people
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find information
by
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on

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internet
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the internet

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might be not a good
way
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. I believe that
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internet
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the internet

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have
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has

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many advantages rather than negative impact if
people
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can access
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internet
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the internet

The noun phrase internet seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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in a positive thing. On the one hand, cutting-edge technology makes
people
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easy to communicate with others
in
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for

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the
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a

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cheap
prize
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price

The word prize doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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and
open
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opens

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the
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apply

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opportunities to know new
people
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. The main reason is
people
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just pay
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internet
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for internet

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connection
such
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as Wi-Fi or data connection monthly or yearly
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at in

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in
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inexpensive
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the inexpensive
an inexpensive

The noun phrase inexpensive prize seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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prize
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price

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.
Furthermore
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, nowadays
people
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can send
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a message
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a message

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message
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and call their friends or families quickly on their
smartphone
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smartphones

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.
Therefore
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, it makes
people
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easier to communicate
eventhough
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even though

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in the far
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way
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away

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or
people
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live in
the
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apply

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different
region
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regions

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or
nation
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nations

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.
In addition
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, because of the advancement of technology makes
people
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also
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open their networking. Not only from their surroundings but
also
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other
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from other

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countries. Social media,
for example
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, is
the
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apply

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well-known
where
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and

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the majority of
people
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used it.
As a result
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,
people
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can know many
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.
On the other hand
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,
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internet
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the internet

The noun phrase internet seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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also
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give
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gives

The plural verb give does not appear to agree with the singular subject internet. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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a
drawback
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drawbacks

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if
people
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do not use
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internet
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the internet

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in a wise. Some
informations
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information
pieces of information

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or news
in
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on

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the
internet
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may be not suitable for some
people
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. There are a lot of negative
contents
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content

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such
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as porn
video
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videos

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or hate speech from others which make
different
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a different
the different

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opinion
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opinions

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.
For instance
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, today many illegal
website
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websites

The singular countable noun website follows the quantifier many, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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provides information but there is
bad
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a bad

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thing.
However
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, if
people
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

can select good news and become open-minded it may
be not bring
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not bring

It appears that the form of the verb bring does not work with be in this sentence.

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much
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many

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effects
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effect

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. To sum up,
although
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internet
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the internet

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is
bad
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a bad

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way
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to find news since there is bad information,
but
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apply

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people
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can manage themselves to get
positive
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a positive
the positive

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thing
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things

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.
Moreover
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,
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internet
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the internet

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in
this
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era gives many positive impacts rather than negative
impact
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impacts

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which makes
people
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can communicate easily and
cheap
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cheaply

Cheap seems to be the wrong part of speech for this context.

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.
Moreover
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, the development of technology makes
people
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easy to other
people
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Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Democratize access
  • Instant messaging
  • Real-time conversations
  • Credible sources
  • Misinformation
  • Unverified facts
  • Reputable news outlets
  • Biased opinions
  • Algorithm-driven content
  • Overreliance
  • Traditional methods
  • Search engines
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